Incredibly beautiful from a writer and ex tennis pro. A small suggestion? I’d take out the very last line. Sorry the teacher and editor and me always comes out, but there is a saying in writing that the story or poem or whatever it is that you’re working on, that the ending is actually too or one sentence before the ending you really have.
this is the one
Incredibly beautiful from a writer and ex tennis pro. A small suggestion? I’d take out the very last line. Sorry the teacher and editor and me always comes out, but there is a saying in writing that the story or poem or whatever it is that you’re working on, that the ending is actually too or one sentence before the ending you really have.
I totally agree!
I tend to underwrite but yes that last line is an unnecessary squeeze.
Oh, I didn’t even realize this was your post. I was wondering who this person was. I’m terrible at looking at by lines. It’s the last thing I look at
I’m voice dictating as I am unable to use my hands so I apologize for the typos
Ohhh I love this.
I don't know, I kinda like that last line.
The whole piece is really strong and sexy and spooky. That last line especially has that haunting quality.
I think of him so often and this just touched my heart! And yes a scar! As so many losses are….
sad but a beautiful tribute